FINAL DRAFT

Maria Hernandez

Ms. Jaeger

October 30, 2011

1^st (A-B)

A World Wide Issue

            “They have open windows without glass planes and their facades are marked by a water line. The polluted stream sometimes overflows and floods them. While sewage from outside Kibera flows into them slum, the sewage from inside never leaves.” This is why slums are thick overpopulated, run down places inhabited by a big portion of people with poor, harsh economic conditions. Therefore slums have a negative effect on human population because the inhabitants of slums live in poor conditions, experience high crime rates, and many times are forced to leave their homes when slums are destroyed. It is due to this that many people never succeed in becoming someone better in life, and live in harsh environments.

            The poor conditions in the inhabitants in a slum have negatively affected the human population. “The foul river carries not just sewage, but also chemicals from farming estates outside the slum. It’s littered with refuse, too: plastic bags, glass bottles. A toddler stands barefoot at the water’s edge.” (Article 2) Based on the quote provided by Sheri Fink; this demonstrates that that the river is contaminated by sewage, plastic bags, glass bottles, and chemicals. It also shows the evidence that they have a poor economy because they cannot even afford a pair of shoes. “Squatters or slums lords put up shacks on land that no one else wants to develop: flood pains, toxic waste dumps, and steep hillsides. The precarious locations and poor quality construction make these settlements vulnerable to disasters like earthquakes and landslides.”(Article 2) This evidence expresses the fact that there are poor conditions in slums. They are more exposed their health and their lives are at risk because they want to live their life the “easy” way, but they are making it more complicated than what it really is. “Many governments demolish slums under the banner of eradicating urban light and crime.” This shows that there is people taking action to stop the crime from spreading, yet the crime never decreases. Then again this is nothing compared to the high crime rates taking place in the slums.

            In slum boundaries there is an existence of high crime rates affecting the people living there. This is another of the many contributions to the affect on human population around the world. “About 2 billion of them will live in slums, primarily in Africa and Asia, lacking access to clean water and working toilets, surrounded by desperation and crime.”(Article 4) This means that beside their lack accessing to good clean water their problem is that there is crime rates increasing as each day goes by. “The favelas of Rio de Janerio, the oldest of which date back to 1897, are famously vibrant, replete with lively bars and low crime rates—even if they happen to be “governed” by a local drug gangs.”(Article 4) This shows that supposedly there is not crime and that is because the whole place is governed by a gang. Therefore want you understand is that because the gang is the one running the place no incidents will be reported even if they occur.  Then it is a fact that crime does exist but it is just not reported. This is why the high crime rates have affected the human population, but not only that; these people are sometimes forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is about to be destroyed, or had already been destroyed.

            A human population can be affected by people living in slums forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is destroyed, or is going to be remodeled to become a working city. “But often it’s just a pretense to squash centers of political opposition or to clear land for developers. Almost always, the slum dwellers simply rebuild or relocate.”(Article 2) Therefore this shows that the government has tried to stop and destroy the slums from expanding more and becoming a bigger impact in the human population development. Even though the government keeps trying they never really find a way to get rid of them because every time the people that were living in the slums get out and recreate a whole new slum. The only difference is that every time they destroy a slum they always rebuild it in a simple manner just much bigger than before; sometimes it can even be double it in size. “However, some slums occupy land that is- or becomes- valuable. And because most slums dwellers aren’t legal occupants of their homes, they risk being evicted, sometimes brutally.”(Article 2) This shows that they are being kicked out of their land no matter what; this is why many people just move from place to place when they see that they are about to be kicked out. The people being chased off their land have lead to a negative contribution on human population.  

            In conclusion Fink uses Document two to express himself on the felling he has toward slums. He argued, “They have open windows without glass planes.” The poor conditions they are living in, being forced to leave their without a shelter to attend to after theirs has been demolished, and the high crime rates have affected the human population in a negatively way. The reason why high crime rates have increased in severe levels is because many of the times the owner of the slum is a gang member. This secures every crime committed that they will not get arrested or caught.  Poor conditions have also affected the human population because many people are exposed to many deadly diseases because of the all the sewage, chemicals, plastic bags, glass bottles, and the toxic wastes dumped all around the slum. Then again people being forced to leave their homes have a giant contribution to the depressing consequence human development. This is because once they are kicked out of their homes they have no place to go to. They either start once again from scratch or they stay on the street to die. The termination is that for many years this has been happening yet no one ever takes action to stop it. Therefore everyone should step up and do something to help the slums from affecting the world human population more than it already has.  

Works Cited:

Blythe Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems.” BBC News Outline. 29 Sept. 2011.             <http://news.bb.co.uk/>

Eaves, Elisabeth. “Two Billion Slum Dwellers.” 6 Nov. 2006. 29 Sept. 2011.          <http://www.forbes.com/>

Fink, Sheri. “Cities of the Poor I: Life in the slums( Kenya).” Public Radio International: The       World. 29 Sept. 2011. <//http://www.theworld.org/>.

“Urbanization.”  World Geography: Understanding a Changing World. 29 Sept. 2011.             <http://worldgeography.abc-clio.com/>

ROUGH DRAFT

A World Wide Issue

            “They have open windows without glass planes and their facades are marked by a water line. The polluted stream sometimes overflows and floods them. While sewage from outside Kibera flows into them slum, the sewage from inside never leaves.” This is why slums are thick overpopulated, run down places inhabited by a big portion of people with poor, harsh economic conditions. Therefore slums have a negative effect on human population because the inhabitants of slums live in poor conditions, experience high crime rates, and many times are forced to leave their homes when slums are destroyed. It is due to this that many people never succeed in becoming someone better in life, and live in harsh environments.

            The poor conditions in the inhabitants in a slum have negatively affected the human population. “The foul river carries not just sewage, but also chemicals from farming estates outside the slum. It’s littered with refuse, too: plastic bags, glass bottles. A toddler stands barefoot at the water’s edge.” (Article 2) Based on the quote provided by Sheri Fink; this demonstrates that that the river is contaminated by sewage, plastic bags, glass bottles, and chemicals. It also shows the evidence that they have a poor economy because they cannot even afford a pair of shoes. “Squatters or slums lords put up shacks on land that no one else wants to develop: flood pains, toxic waste dumps, steep hillsides. The precarious locations and poor quality construction make these settlements vulnerable to disasters like earthquakes and landslides.”(Article 2) This evidence expresses the fact that there are poor conditions in slums. They are more exposed their health and their lives are at risk because they want to live their life the “easy” way, but they are making it more complicated than what it really is. “Many governments demolish slums under the banner of eradicating urban light and crime.” This shows that there is people taking action to stop the crime from spreading, yet the crime never decreases. Then again this is nothing compared to the high crime rates taking place in the slums.

            In slum boundaries there is an existence of high crime rates affecting the people living there. This is another of the many contributions to the affect on human population around the world. “About 2 billion of them will live in slums, primarily in Africa and Asia, lacking access to clean water and working toilets, surrounded by desperation and crime.”(Article 4) This means that beside their lack accessing to good clean water their problem is that there is crime rates increasing as each day goes by. “The favelas of Rio de Janerio, the oldest of which date back to 1897, are famously vibrant, replete with lively bars and low crime rates—even if they happen to be “governed” by a local drug gangs.”(Article 4) This shows that supposedly there is not crime and that is because the whole place is governed by a gang. Therefore want you understand is that because the gang is the one running the place no incidents will be reported even if they occur.  Then it is a fact that crime does exist but it is just not reported. This is why the high crime rates have affected the human population, but not only that; these people are sometimes forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is about to be destroyed, or had already been destroyed.

            A human population can be affected by people living in slums forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is destroyed, or is going to be remodeled to become a working city. “But often it’s just a pretense to squash centers of political opposition or to clear land for developers. Almost always, the slum dwellers simply rebuild or relocate.”(Article 2) Therefore this shows that the government has tried to stop and destroy the slums from expanding more and becoming a bigger impact in the human population development. Even though the government keeps trying they never really find a way to get rid of them because every time the people that were living in the slums get out and recreate a whole new slum. The only difference is that every time they destroy a slum they always rebuild it in a simple manner just much bigger than before; sometimes it can even be double it in size. “However, some slums occupy land that is- or becomes- valuable. And because most slums dwellers aren’t legal occupants of their homes, they risk being evicted, sometimes brutally.”(Article 2) This shows that they are being kicked out of their land no matter what; this is why many people just move from place to place when they see that they are about to be kicked out. The people being chased off their land have lead to a negative contribution on human population.  

            In conclusion Fink uses Document two to express himself on the felling he has toward slums. He argued, “They have open windows without glass planes.” The poor conditions they are living in, being forced to leave their without a shelter to attend to after theirs has been demolished, and the high crime rates have affected the human population in a negatively way. The reason why high crime rates have increased in severe levels is because many of the times the owner of the slum is a gang member. This secures every crime committed that they will not get arrested or caught.  Poor conditions have also affected the human population because many people are exposed to many deadly diseases because of the all the sewage, chemicals, plastic bags, glass bottles, and the toxic wastes dumped all around the slum. Then again people being forced to leave their homes have a giant contribution to the depressing consequence human development. This is because once they are kicked out of their homes they have no place to go to. They either start once again from scratch or they stay on the street to die. The termination is that for many years this has been happening yet no one ever takes action to stop it. Therefore everyone should step up and do something to help the slums from affecting the world human population more than it already has.  

INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH

"THEY HAVE OPEN WINDOWS WITHOUT GLASS PLANES AND THEIR FACADES ARE MARKED BY A WATER LINE. THE POLLUTED STREAM SOMETIMES OVERFLOWS AND FLOODS THEM. WHILE SEWAGE FROM OUTSIDE KIBERA FLOWS AND FLOODS THEM. WHILE SEWAGE FROM INSIDE NEVER LEAVES." THIS IS WHY A SLUM IS AN OVER POPULATED AREA LIVING IN HARSH ENVIORMENTS. SLUMS HAVE A NEGATIVE EFFECT ON HUMAN POPULATION BECAUSE INHABITANTS OF SLUMS LIVE IN POOR CONDITIONS, EXPERIENCE HIGH CRIME RATES, AND MANY TIMES ARE FORCED TO LEAVE THEIR HOMES WHEN SLUMS ARE DESTROYED. IT IS BECAUSE SLUMS HAVE SLUMS THAT MANY PEOPLE NEVER SUCCEED AND BECOME SOMEONE BETTER IN LIFE , AND IVE IN A NOT SO GOOD INVIORMENT.

THESIS STATEMENT

SLUMS HAVE A NEGATIVE EFFECT ON HUMAN POPULATIONS BECAUSE INHABITANTS OF SLUMS LIVE IN POOR CONDITIONS, EXPERIENCE HIGH CRIME RATES, AND MANY TIMES ARE FORCED TO LEAVE THIER HOMES WHEN SLUMS ARE DESTROYED.

Outline

introduction
A: "They have open windows without glass planes. And their facades are floods them. While sewage from outside Kibera flows  into the slum, the sewage from inside never leaves."

B: Slums are a thick over populated , run down  place inhabited by a big portion of people with a poor economic conditions.   

C: Slums have a negative effect on human populations because inhabitants of slums live in poor conditions, experience high crime rates and many are forced to leave their homes when slums are destroyed.

D: It is because slums that many people never succeed and become someone better in life, and live in a not so good enviorment.


Defendable point #1

A: The poor conditions of the inhabitants of humans in slums is one negative effect.

B: " The Foul River carries not just sewage but also chemicals from farming states outside the slum. It's littered with refuse, too: plastic bags, glass bottle. A toddler stands barefoot at the waters edge." (article 2)

C: in this quote it demonstrates that the river is contaminated not only by sewage, but with chemicals too. It is also surrounded by trash.

D: The fact that the river is contaminated proves that the people living in slums live in poor conditions. This is yet nothing compared to the high crime rates taking place.

Defendable point #2:

A: in slums there is a high criminal rate that is contributing to the affect on human population.

B: "About 2 billion of them will live in slums, primarily in Africa and Asia, lacking access to clean drinking water and working toilets, surrounded by desperation and crime."(article 4)

C: This means that besides poor conditions there is desperation and crime among the people.

D: Therefore the crime affects the human population, but not only that; these people are sometimes forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is destroyed.

Defendable point #3

A: A human population can be affected by people living in slums forced to leave their homes because the slum they are living in is  destroyed or is going to be rebuild into a working city.

B: "Many governments demolish slums under the banner of eradicating urban blight and crime. But often it's just a pretense to quash centers of political opposition or to clear land for developers. Almost always, the slum dwellers simply rebuild or relocate."

C: This informs the reader that the government tries to get ride of the slums but they never rally demolish them. This is for every time they destroy one the people always rebuild them, but this time in a faster way, and sometimes twice as big as before. They will take longer, but they will not give up on constructing a new slum.
D: The reason why the government tries to get ride of the slums because they affect the human population.


Conclusion:

A: In document 2 Fink says, "They have open windows without glass planes."

B: The poor conditions, being forced to leave their homes with, and high crime raters have affected the the human population growth.

C: The crime has reached severed high levels because they need money. The poor conditions people live in has a higher probability on getting sick.

D: Therefore slums have affected the human population growth over the years. The fact that crime is happening in slums everyday.